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Sisterhooves Slighted: A FiM Picture Book! by TommyOliverDraws Sisterhooves Slighted: A FiM Picture Book! by TommyOliverDraws

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So…its finally here. The Scootaloo Book, now “Sisterhooves Slighted” is complete, and available for download below!

I wanna thank all of you who have stuck with me here and / or on Tumblr throughout the production, your presence really helped keep me focused and ensured that it was completed. I really hope you enjoy it, its been quite the labor of love for me xD.

EDIT: dA's built in pdf reader kinda butchers the colors here. I'd suggest downloading it to your computer and reading it in Acrobat / Foxit / whatever your default pdf reader is!

EDIT 2: It made EqD! (which you all probably know xD) [link]
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Zexoguy Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2014
A subject matter that just never gets old. Love it.
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maddiepoke978 Featured By Owner May 17, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
sO SwEEt!!!
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stupidtai Featured By Owner May 15, 2014
I love your reviews. I love your art. IS THERE ANYTHING THIS GUY CAN'T DO RIGHT?
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Tuttaliny Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2014  Hobbyist Artist
I saw that cutie mark at the end and cringed knowing that the comic won't continue :(
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misskittymuffin Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
soooooo cute :D 
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KlowdTheUmbreon Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
My two favorite characters getting together and spending an awesome time together! XD Loved it!
The ending with the cupcakes was hilarious!
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SimonSeville27 Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
First and foremost, I really, really, really love this book.  I think you did an amazing job not only creating a really interesting story and developing Scootaloo in a way that hasn't really been developed in the series to my liking, but I think you really made the book believable not only as a piece of fan-work, but as a story that could easily be integrated into the show as an episode with little change.

That being said, because I know that you have a respect for constructive criticism, I feel it necessary to point out a few things that I personally noticed that I believe are areas that could be improved upon.  First of all, while I think the vast majority of the dialogue is stellar, I think there are a few areas where slight changes would have made it more believable in the canon.  For example, on page 30, you refer to Pinkie's expression as a trademark grin, and then say "Okie dokie then" instead of using her classic "okie dokie lokie" line.  I think that it created a strange contrast when you specifically mention a "trademark" attribute and then go against one of the classic trademark lines of dialogue for Pinkie.

Looking at that page I also feel I should mention that in some areas the writing seemed inappropriately casual for an otherwise professional quality book.  For example, on this page you say "Cya later" instead of "See ya later".  While I completely understand and agree that grammatical errors and slang are appropriate in dialogue, this is written slang which makes it non-nonsensical to use for spoken dialogue.  If for instance, you had been discussing something Pinkie was writing, and she wrote down "Cya later", that would be absolutely appropriate.  However, since "Cya" and "See ya" sound no different in verbal communication, there is no benefit to using the less proper form for the writing.  Again, I don't think this makes the book bad, but I think it's something to consider for future works to make them even more awesome.  On that same note, I personally would refrain from using all capital letters to illustrate excitement.  It may just be a difference of opinion and style, but I think it makes it, again, feel overly casual for a near-professional quality book.

The third thing I want to mention is that in some spots, it seemed like it was hard to figure out who the target audience was.  In a lot of parts, the writing utilized short sentences and simplistic language, making it feel that it was written as a picture book would generally be.  But then, there are glaring parts where strikingly more advanced terminology is used.  Like, "A palpable awkwardness filled the room."  I mainly mention this as something I personally struggle with in my writing, that I think I'm seeing in this story as well.  When I write, I naturally write in a very straightforward and simplistic tonality and style.  That being said, certain more complex words and phrases are also natural to me, so those will end up in my writing making a strange contrast where a story feels overly simplistic for a mature audience, but overly complex for a younger audience.  I am a much worse offender in that regard than you are in this story, but because I think that particularly since this is a picture book which would traditionally be written for a younger audience, the bits of complex dialogue can feel awkward in the story.

The last thing is that I felt like the sun setting scene conflicted with the traditional canon of Celestia and Luna raising and lowering the sun and moon.  At least in my interpretation of the canon, when it turns from day to night or night to day, the entire process of raising the moon and lowering the sun only takes a few seconds.  Because of that, I feel like having an entire scene with them watching the sun set is contradictory to canon.  Then again, there might be a scene in the series that I'm not remembering where they had a prolonged sunset or sunrise scene.  But from my personal interpretation of the canon (especially after watching S4E2), the process is much more expedited than in this story.

Again, I loved the story and normally I wouldn't nitpick about those types of things, particularly in something written almost two years ago, but I think that you came so close to making a professional quality story which could easily be an episode of the series, that I would be remiss if I didn't point out the few things I did notice that could be improved upon.  I kind of feel guilty because I didn't point out all the things you did right in the story, but that would be way too long of a post because I think other than those few nit picky details, everything else about the story was superb.  I should mention though that while I like Scootaloo, I'm actually not a huge fan of her in the actual show because she is grossly underdeveloped for the number of episodes she is in.  That being said this story actually made me like her a lot more because I think that the way she was developed in canon was a shoddy attempt at doing what you did here.  While I think Sleepless in Ponyville was a step in the right direction, the whole looking for a pony to take her under their wing thing seemed overly forced and lacking in an actual understanding of why she wants someone to be a role model.  Contrarily, I think you made her feelings much more believable by discussing it as her wishing she had a sister.  I think that made it so that people who are only-children could relate to Scootaloo and really makes a lot of the canon material more believable. It just seemed like your take on Scootaloo was really what was lacking for me in the series to really start liking her character a lot.

Anyway, you did a really great job overall, I can't wait to look through your other works!
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Ralo247 Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2014
Alphabetically and by subject, still not enough i think, sorry i forgot the alphabetical part, still love it!
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Ralo247 Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2014
OH MA GOSH! THAT WAS BRILLIANT!
however i think you underestimate twilight's sorting abilities.... only by subject, ARE YOU MAD!?!
overall, it was absolutely brilliant :D
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TommyOliverDraws Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
^///^;
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